Final draft...for now

This script is definitely something I intend to keep working on. There are still many things that need fixing. The side love stories, for instance. Also, some scenes still feel awkward to me, like whenever Kate's sister comes up, especially at the end. I want it to be meaningful...not just a way to get exposition. And I need to keep researching courtroom procedure.

All in all, I'm proud of it.

What's next?

I'm writing a horror film with a friend in the major. He loves horror movies and I like good horror movies (the kind that actually have a purpose and not just meant to scare the hell out of you). It should be interesting to see what we come up with.

I'm also going to finally try comedy. I've been avoiding it because it's not something I think I'll be good at, but we'll see. I thought of an idea that I'm looking forward to fleshing out over co-op.

New Scenes

I kept thinking that something was missing in the script, so I added two scenes. One is Jayden in the hospital, having his friends come to visit. I did this for a few reasons. I wanted to show as much as possible in the beginning of the script that Limits is a "bad kid." I want the audience's affection for Limits and sympathy to grow as they read. So the hospital scene is meant to deceive the audience into believing that Jayden is a "good guy." It also introduces the idea of easy fixes, which is a theme throughout the script. And further, it shows that Father Crogan chooses which students to worry about.

Another scene I added is the back and forth between Aubrey going to the viewing for Mike and Limits in the Juvenile Detention Center again being bullied around by other kids. The close relationship between Brodie and Limits comes out in this scene because for the first time, someone (Brodie) helps Limits when he needed it. It also shows that even though the adults are standing in a church, they treat Aubrey like an outcast. This is also the Pinch I was looking for to give Kate a setback before she loses the hearing. After the hearing, the situation changes and what Kate was trying so hard to do (keep the case juvie) fails, so now the script switches to the criminal arena, the place Kate thought she didn't want to go.